https://www.thestorydepartment.com/logline-blood-list-2013-week-1/ Story. Screenplay. Sale. Sun, 13 Dec 2015 05:07:01 +0000 hourly 1 https://www.thestorydepartment.com/logline-blood-list-2013-week-1/#comment-334373 Sun, 13 Dec 2015 05:07:01 +0000 https://thestorydepartment.com/?p=30451#comment-334373 I think you’re on the right track with this: “She is a time elemental who has lived since the bgninnieg of time. When time is messed with and if she is dead then time will cease to be.”Those are great stakes and I get a better feel for her. She doesn’t just need to find out who/what she is. The self discovery is secondary – the big issue is what she can do with her new found powers. Or even that she must learn to unleash her powers or else she, and all time, will cease to exist. Me thinks you just need a little tweaking. Remember – rants are good! They can reveal some of the best story elements :)

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