https://www.thestorydepartment.com/logline-it-black-list-2012-week-27/ Story. Screenplay. Sale. Sun, 13 Dec 2015 05:15:57 +0000 hourly 1 https://www.thestorydepartment.com/logline-it-black-list-2012-week-27/#comment-334376 Sun, 13 Dec 2015 05:15:57 +0000 https://thestorydepartment.com/?p=29944#comment-334376 When the time machines seenvteen-year-old Kali Addison’s dad invented are destroyed, she discovers the power to travel through time is within her. With a heavy handed government wanting to reproduce Kali for their own use and those who wiped out her dads work wanting her dead, she hardly has time to figure out who she really is. If one of them catch her before she does, it’s times up for everyone.Agree with Guilie’s punctuation advice. A few questions:Do you need the words ‘heavy-handed’ or ‘hardly’? And how is her identity related to time’s up? Is she a human bomb? Your story is a tough one to condense but I think you’re close. Good luck!

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