Comments on: The Judges – Circalit Loglines (14) https://www.thestorydepartment.com/the-judges-circalit-loglines-14-2/ Story. Screenplay. Sale. Thu, 12 Apr 2012 21:27:00 +0000 hourly 1 By: ozzywood https://www.thestorydepartment.com/the-judges-circalit-loglines-14-2/#comment-1167 Thu, 12 Apr 2012 21:27:00 +0000 https://thestorydepartment.com/?p=22561#comment-1167 In reply to Cyeowart.

Great to see you improve on the initial logline!

Why not submit it to https://loglineit.com/ where the readers can give their comments…

Also an opportunity for you to give your personal feedback to your peers.

Thank you for stopping by!

]]> By: Cyeowart https://www.thestorydepartment.com/the-judges-circalit-loglines-14-2/#comment-1166 Thu, 12 Apr 2012 14:44:00 +0000 https://thestorydepartment.com/?p=22561#comment-1166 Thank you for reviewing my logline for Yesternight. I find writing loglines very hard, so thank you for your insight. Perhaps the following is a little better?

In 1955, a young Debutante is sole witness to murder and must enlist the help of another criminal, his niece, to help her get to safety. But the killer is on their trail and he’ll stop at nothing to silence them.

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