Comments on: The Judges – Circalit Loglines (20) https://www.thestorydepartment.com/the-judges-circalit-loglines-20/ Story. Screenplay. Sale. Thu, 24 May 2012 14:43:00 +0000 hourly 1 By: sharkeatingman https://www.thestorydepartment.com/the-judges-circalit-loglines-20/#comment-1192 Thu, 24 May 2012 14:43:00 +0000 https://thestorydepartment.com/?p=23308#comment-1192 Re: “The Sleeper”- I’m on Meg’s side on this one. I think the concept is intriguing, reminding me of Bronson’s “The Mechanic”. I take exception to Steve’s comment about the age of the protag, especially as someone who writes primarily older protag’s for older actors as a mission. You only need to look around and see the major star power approcahing 70 and 80 yrs of age, including Eastwood, Hackman, Pacino, De Niro, Duvall, etc. (and that’s just the male actors).

The logline seems to still be missing something. “Decides” is somewhat inactive; “coerced” or “forced to” makes in more of a conflict. I would like to see a stronger irony; perhaps making the target more ironic.

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